Whoa! I didn't / couldn't respond to your earlier inquiry about disgust or horror ['access denied' + a sneaking suspicion that perhaps I individually merited being denied access-- but enough about me!] It strikes me that you've set yourself an interesting technical task as a writer, doing this serialization. The segments are short-- almost like a text to accompany a graphic novel. They are likewise extremely vivid: and thereby risk straying over the fine edge that divides the intense and the risible. There's also the riskiness of writing about the most fundamental human questions-- that the reader deals with his/her own capacity for wonder/horror by snickering at things beyond the individual's capacity to 'take straight'. Gallows humor is a time-honored method of dispatching intimations of mortality, grief, and rage. In my eyes, you're doing fine-- keep it coming!